Here is a poem I wrote

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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by tonieee » Tue Apr 01, 2014 23:01

It's very lovely.

Here's a picture I took of the money tree recently:

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but Pete's poem catches it better than my lack of photography skillz.

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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by noLooking » Wed Apr 02, 2014 00:37

Seeing a tree that has been named for it's appearance reminded me of something someone showed me when I was a teenager. We were walking in some woods near his house and he stopped to show me a tree with a small, round area at just about waist height that looked a bit like a bum. He told me that a few years earlier, when they were smaller, this had become known, predictably enough, as the bum tree, and that children had run up to it, pretended to have sex with it and then run away again, laughing nervously. It was considered slightly unsavoury to do so, but apparently it was so tempting that they couldn't stop themselves. Thinking about it now, it seems like a strange homoerotic ritual, where the children could act out impulses that they would have been uncomfortable to name, but were perfectly happy to engage in as a form of play. It seems like the kind of thing that Will Self could have written a novel about, before he got too hard to read, with the ritual of the bum tree becoming the foundation of some kind of strange new religion or society in the distant future, and it's subconscious implications worked out on a grand scale. Perhaps I'll try and write it myself , if I ever feel up to it. I'm sorry if this is rather inappropriate to post in this (or indeed any) thread, but the picture of the tree did remind me of it, and it gives me something to do whilst I fail to sleep. I don't know if it makes it any better, but I think the poem's really nice.

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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by Cloudy Cat » Thu Apr 03, 2014 11:23

I loved the image of "zesty bracken". And your Humberston poem was excellent. Great stuff.

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Post by humblebee » Thu Apr 03, 2014 11:50

Thanks, you lot. xx

I seem to have started writing poetry again, quite a bit, for the first time in yonks. Might have to see if I can get some of it published somewhere.

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I wrote a poem, is it any good?

Post by Yex » Thu Jul 09, 2015 11:53

I couldn't find a thread for this, but if there is one, feel free to destroy this thread and put my post in its appropriate place.

I couldn't sleep and wrote this instead:

genius of immortal pen
come and visit me again
as you once, long long ago
graced the wit of Th.F.M

and as home from work he tread
his children all were spiced, not spanked
and from his pipe smoke, laughing soft
a touch of gentle wisdom flowed
enlightening darkness of his day

a soldier doesn’t have a name
a writer signs his soul in ink
but if a writer were the same
and leaving nothing but a wink
and weathered though the photograph
that bears the glyphs of ancient lands
I know those the that's rolling ‘long
is yours, the voice Th.F.M

if mother’s father had his way
a fleeting moment e’er would stay
but knowing this a failing cause
he tumbled on into the now
forsaking why, except when if
committed to an always how
and if in transient passing thought
a joke should come a stay a while
then sit you down, and have a drink
for you may too be all in flame

a largeness in his heart, I’m told
distinguished him from other men
for every stranger was a friend
and all convictions gentle were
so should the drip become a flood
a great Barrage of if, now when
thank Adonai for gilled amends
and if you can remember, try
to not forget your fountain pens
for travelers and wanderers
pray at the feet of kindnesses
and none so sweet a friend have I
than one they called Th.F.M
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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by humblebee » Fri Jul 10, 2015 10:57

Hi Yex - I like the sort of mystical feel of that, the elusiveness. Thanks for sharing! Do you think the mood of the poem is related to its origins in sleeplessness? It's making me think of Coleridge and Kubla Khan - that sort of dream-poem feel (though you may not have required vast quantities of opium to create it, of course).

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Post by Yex » Fri Jul 10, 2015 19:15

humblebee wrote:Do you think the mood of the poem is related to its origins in sleeplessness? It's making me think of Coleridge and Kubla Khan - that sort of dream-poem feel (though you may not have required vast quantities of opium to create it, of course).
Perhaps. I write the most when I have insomnia. I feel like it does have something to do with the wall between the conscious and unconscious being thin. With this poem, I was laying in bed, and the first stanza - the invocation of the muse - popped into my head, and I just knew that I had to get up and write, and then I wrote the rest almost in a state of automatic writing. It just kind of flowed out of me without really thinking about what I was writing.
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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by humblebee » Fri Jul 31, 2015 14:27

Anoraks! If you fancy a read, three of the poems I wrote last year (including 'The Money Tree', which we looked at back up the thread) have been published today in this blog from Pankhearst, along with an interview in which I waffle about music, performance, inspiration, pints of tea, and, um, poetry:

https://pankhearst.wordpress.com/2015/0 ... ete-green/

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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by Yex » Sat Jan 09, 2016 07:03

Just for fun, I typed the lyrics to Salmon Girl, a song from my first Salute to the Salmon album, into google translate, and translated it from English > German > Russian > Filipino > Thai > Icelandic > Hebrew > Punjabi > Yiddish > Finnish > Arabic > Haitian Creole > Welsh > Yoruba > Turkish > English.

The results are rather bleak:

Weapons increase
You can make the death chamber
I do not know you have to work harder

Not the fear of young fish
I made a mistake
I do not know you have to work harder

youth
buoy
Next
We do
This is a good thing better

I hope you do not get a break sometimes
These sites should call the power grip
I do not know you have to work harder
But if you want to rush it
We are building a good relationship and I would love to do it
I do not know you have to work harder

youth
buoy
Next
We do
This is a good thing better

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For reference, here are the original lyrics:

Struggle all your life just to get back upstream
will you make it there or will your death be obscene
I don't know anyone who works harder than you

salmon girl. don't you be afraid
about any of the mistakes that you made
I don't know anyone who works harder than you

so swim
swim on
and we'll be there by the dawn
and when we do
it's gonna be alright, alright

sometimes it seems you don't ever get a rest
a place to stay and to call your only nest
I don't know anyone who works harder than you
but even though they might hurry you along
the love we've made will keep us oh so strong
I don't know anyone who works harder than you

so swim
swim on
and we'll be there by the dawn
and when we do
it's gonna be alright, alright
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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by Yex » Sat Jan 09, 2016 13:41

Here's another insomnia-poem:

Lips reluctant, until I asked of thee;
never did you cease Anatine piety
I reached for your pedestal, star-stuck, Ultimately
truly not so much foam-born as arrow-stung
Chiron in Furs, mystic scarab pushing dung
Did the poppy bloom in mystic unity
red with the blood of dear friend to me
or simply alleviate some malady
so heinous it burned my skin
though it wasn’t even my own sin?

Gravitational dalliance
hesitation to enter trance
by the light of a flickering flame
into my memory burned your fame
Immortal your celebrity
(which of course is no use to me
never heard the prayer I compromised
from your lips, but maybe your eyes
betrayed the vow, I can’t recall)
left on the wayside, make sense of it all
granite counters, undoubtedly
hewn from a stone at the base of a tree
adorned and disguised as antiquity
what then became of a rogue such as me?

off to the dawn to prepare for a feast
festering still under shackles of yeast
mana tastes better than a single bean
cruel and heartless and callous and mean
stalk that ascended to opium dream
though I will still search for a garment piscine
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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by humblebee » Thu Mar 24, 2016 10:50

Hey Anorak - a thing of mine is published online today if anyone would like a look. It's a poem partly about indiepop and about different musical approaches to the unique predicament of (cough) our generation.

Here's the link: https://t.co/LX9bGHELA9

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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by noLooking » Thu Mar 24, 2016 12:37

humblebee wrote:Hey Anorak - a thing of mine is published online today if anyone would like a look. It's a poem partly about indiepop and about different musical approaches to the unique predicament of (cough) our generation.
Wow, does that mean that you're *gulp* the voice of a generation? : )

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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by humblebee » Thu Mar 24, 2016 13:14

andyi wrote:Wow, does that mean that you're *gulp* the voice of a generation? : )
That's me.

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