Here is a poem I wrote

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Here is a poem I wrote

Post by humblebee » Thu Nov 25, 2010 11:11 am

(Didn't know where to put this thread; could an admin please move it if there's somewhere better? Thanks!)

I've written a poem and I want people to read it, but I didn't want to post the text of it on Anorak, so here's a link:
http://sparklemotion.co.uk/moment.htm

I'd love to hear your comments on it, Anorak. And when I say comments, obviously I mean lavish praise and offers of hot soup.

Soup.

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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by String Bean Jen » Thu Nov 25, 2010 11:28 am

The romance of autumn, near winter. Really lovely, Pete. My favourite two lines are (probably predictably) 'a cyclist sculpts...obliquely on the hilltop.' I can visualise this image very well, have maybe even been in a moment like this, though not on a hilltop in my flat riverside neighbourhood.
There's more than one use for every part

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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by humblebee » Thu Nov 25, 2010 1:17 pm

String Bean Jen wrote:The romance of autumn, near winter. Really lovely, Pete. My favourite two lines are (probably predictably) 'a cyclist sculpts...obliquely on the hilltop.' I can visualise this image very well, have maybe even been in a moment like this, though not on a hilltop in my flat riverside neighbourhood.
Thanks Jennifer!

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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by humblebee » Fri Jan 28, 2011 12:12 pm

Here is another poem I wrote. Recommended for admirers of fixed poetic forms, environmentalists, windsurfers, Grimbarians and Meggies.

http://sparklemotion.co.uk/humberston.htm

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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by miss_steff » Sun Jan 30, 2011 1:31 pm

lovely :)

Steff xxx

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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by humblebee » Mon Jan 31, 2011 7:57 pm

Thank you so much, Steff.

I didn't just mean this thread to be for my poems, by the way, Anorak, so if anyone else would like to share any, post up.

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Bloody Awful Poetry

Post by heidisuperhero » Sun Oct 21, 2012 7:37 pm

It surely goes without saying that a vast number of indiepoppers must also be poets, right?

Anyone fancy sharing their poetry? If you will I will.

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Re: Bloody Awful Poetry

Post by moopind » Sun Oct 21, 2012 8:51 pm

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Re: Bloody Awful Poetry

Post by heidisuperhero » Sun Oct 21, 2012 10:04 pm

moopind wrote:See this thread?
Well it bombed the first time around, possibly because the poem was linked rather than directly posted in the thread itself. So while I appreciate the fact that it's been tried before, I don't think we should get into a situation where in 50 years time we're bumping threads from 2001.

And if this also bombs, fair game, perhaps I was too optimistic!

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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by heidisuperhero » Wed Oct 24, 2012 4:51 pm

Fair compromise.

Here's one I did....all feedback appreciated. :)

they call it lady’s pincushion
the field scabious
such a stark and abhorrent name
for something so incredibly beautiful
so delicate and serene
so quiet that beetles from miles around come to sit on this one flower
an antidote
a flag that blows in the wind

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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by crystalball » Tue Jan 22, 2013 1:34 pm

I had a lovely dream that Jonny had written a great poem and shared it with us here.

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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by humblebee » Tue Jan 22, 2013 2:06 pm

Oh, put it back Jonny! I really liked that - I just didn't comment right away cos I was reading on my phone!

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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by jayen_aitch » Tue Jan 22, 2013 6:41 pm

Aw, go on then.

I reconsidered after I posted it and worried it was a tad sixth form, but if you like it...

At Sea.

I worry now, what happens if I stop?
It's consistent, constant forward motion
That provides a surface I can float on.
Soon it will slow, or go, and I must drop
Below into the cold and crushing deep.
Still, and far more pressing than the sinking
Is the pressure born of overthinking
Dials creep. Listen; creak, creak. I dream of sleep.

Plummeting fast into the icy blue.
Past any decompression chamber's aid
I see a shade of something so like you
Sparkling, shining so brightly that I'm swayed
Seen this way it should be little wonder
Gladly I give my leave. Pull me under.

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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by crystalball » Tue Jan 22, 2013 7:23 pm

It's wonderful.

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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by jayen_aitch » Tue Jan 22, 2013 8:29 pm

Thanks, that's very nice of you to say.

Been a while since I played with sonnets... I do like them a lot.

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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by crystalball » Tue Jan 22, 2013 11:05 pm

Sorry, didn't mean to write my previous post and run away... I can't write sonnets without resorting to ridiculous rhyming patterns. Yours is very elegant, Jonny. Lovely alliteration.

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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by humblebee » Mon Mar 31, 2014 1:34 pm

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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by jayen_aitch » Tue Apr 01, 2014 6:02 am

He is indeed.

That's lovely Pete. I felt likeI was really there with you guys.

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Re: Here is a poem I wrote

Post by humblebee » Tue Apr 01, 2014 9:39 am

Thanks you two!

I thought I'd leave the Word spellcheck underlining in for added authenticity.

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